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I would write
Quote: Players who start streaming just before the peak hours will get the unmodified master playlist and will not be affected.
leaving out "they" and "thus".
btw, you have "the the" in your sentence.
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I'd agree - "thus" is pretty archaic and not needed in "Normal writing".
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Well, you're from Wales, thus you have no idea about that! 
Just kidding of course!
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For some reason "thus" often works well for me. I like non-standard words, it keeps things interesting. I used "notwithstanding" a couple times in a training manual. Once and a while I like to use the interrobang (Alt+8253) in an e-mail. A great and underused punctuation mark. Not sure how to do it here though.
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The trouble with that is that it's demonstrating your education, your intelligence. Like using "diacritic" to describe the accents that appear above or below a character in some languages. It's the right word, but 99% of people have never even heard of it!
That's not what a manual or user instruction is about: it's to help the user, not make him feel stupid. Took me a long time to realise that: you write for "average Joe" (or more likely for "less-than-average Joe") so that what you write is as clear as possible to everybody. Save clever language for talking to clever people - who will probably critique your usage, but that's life! 
For example, in the previous sentence I used a dash, which is wrong but understood. It should — of course — be an em dash as in this sentence.
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I agree with this, generally. I design and build analytical software for use by actuaries, so the intended audience isn't the average Joe. Thus, I feel I have some latitude in this regard.
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Thanks good answer, and yeah, I do have the "the the" in almost every sentence I write  is there a diagnosis for that?
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megaadam wrote: is there a diagnosis for that?
not enough ![Java | [Coffee]](https://codeproject.freetls.fastly.net/script/Forums/Images/coffee.gif)
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Or too much of it. 
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SACRILEGE... there is never too much coffee or bacon
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I agree. Keep it short and simple. Remove the unnecessary bloat.
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My English tutor always said that, when in doubt, to go for two shorter sentences. Might not be the best way to create literature, but is always a good tip when writing manuals or documentation.
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I would simplify it further:-
"Only users who start streaming inside peak hours will be affected".
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Or better:
Users streaming during peak hours may receive a modified master playlist.
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"the peak hours" is awkward -- normally, the phrase is without "the", as in "during peak hours"
"and they will thus not be affected" => remove it entirely. "will get the unmodified master playlist" is sufficient. Or: "will not be affected and will get the unmodified master playlist."
"will get the" => "will receive". "Get" is sort of low class and probably lacking descriptiveness.
"will get the the unmodified" => I'm assuming the second "the" was a typo?
Consider reversing the logic of the sentence:
"Users who start streaming during peak hours will receive a modified playlist. Users who start streaming just before peak hours are unaffected."
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Wowzerz! Thanx! I think I owe you a ![Beer | [beer]](https://codeproject.freetls.fastly.net/script/Forums/Images/beer.gif) !
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And while we are at it, we could replasse all the 'will's with 'shall', thus making it clear that there shall be no discussions about this. 
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megaadam wrote: Users who start streaming during the peak hours will be affected. Users who start streaming just before the peak hours will get the the unmodified master playlist and they will thus not be affected.
You have two 'the's in that sentence
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I do not! I never never repeat myself.
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Bless you, bless you, bless you for using "affected" instead of the abomination that is "impacted."
Wisdom teeth are sometimes "impacted." Otherwise that word should rarely be used
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In my opinion, "get" can always be replaced by a better word!
I use "get" way too much in my own speech; I try to never use it in a document.
You get understand my point?
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Users who initiate streaming during peak hours will be affected. Users who initiate streaming before peak hours will not be affected, and acquire the unmodified master playlist.
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Sounds like a bathroom break. Muzak playlist?
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